Your picture still pricks like cactus
when an unread letter announces
your death -- five years ago.
Too late to slap you now.
Damn it.
( i did have six lines. so now I have altered the lines breaks to make five lines)
-- Mar Walker
Unresolved hurt makes havoc with grief.
Unresolved hurt makes havoc with grief.
The PROMPT: "Write and capture humorous incidents related to love in a 5-line love poem called a tanka." I got the five line part, and the love part. I missed the humor and settled for irony.....
7 comments:
It works for me, humor comes in all shapes and sizes, and both tanka (and haiku/senryu) capture it all. ;-)
Alan
www.withwords.org.uk
Powerful! I like it! Shows how pain never goes away.
I count 6 lines. . . But that's okay! Because I enjoyed this anyhow. :)
Hahaha! Love it :)
I like it too!
oh man that was puuurrrrfectly peaceful... i had to laugh out loud for no other reason than yeah!!! erotic engine
OMG I didn't realize I had six lines..... arrgh... I do have 31 syllables I think.... hmmmm have to redo the line breaks.....
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